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China foreign visitors have experienced vs China foreign visitors read about before the trips.

The easiest way to get to know a country is to read a travel blog or book about it. However, travel writing may reflect personal bias and it can quickly become outdated. China is a good case in point. The rapid development of China has created a clear divide between the perceptions formed through online reading and the firsthand experience of foreign visitors, especially in terms of air quality and places to visit.

Many travel bloggers used to talk about the heavy air pollution in China, which would put off anyone planning to visit northern China in winter. However, those who have experienced northern China in winter in recent years can tell you that this is an outdated concern, thanks to China's continuous efforts to control air pollution. Northern China oftern has clearer, bluer skies in winter than in other seasons. Snowfall is guaranteed in many locations and makes China's beautiful landscaps even more attractive. Iconic landmarks such as the Great Wall are even more beautiful when covered with snow in winter.

For travelers who only seek advice from blogs or books, their pre-trip image of China focuses only on a few big cities, such as Beijing, Shanghai, Guangzhou and Shenzhen. Smaller cities are considered less fun and therefore not worth visiting. However, foreign visitors who have experienced China before may tell you that they found more joy and great scenery, and gained a deeper understanding of China, by visiting some smaller cities. For them, China's beauty lies not only in its vibrant metropolises, but also in the ancient city walls and spectacular natural wonders.

In conclusion, what you read about a place may differ greatly from your actual experience of it. While travel blogs and books can be helpful, they should not be your only source of information. The best way to truly understand a place is to experience it for yourself.

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China foreign visitors have experienced vs China foreign visitors read about before the trips.

The easiest way to get to know a country is to read a travel blog or book about it. However, travel writing may reflect personal bias and it can quickly become outdated. China is a good case in point. The rapid development of China has created a clear divide between the perceptions formed through online reading and the firsthand experience of foreign visitors, especially in terms of air quality and places to visit.

Many travel bloggers used to talk about the heavy air pollution in China, which would put off anyone planning to visit northern China in winter. However, those who have experienced northern China in winter in recent years can tell you that this is an outdated concern, thanks to China's continuous efforts to control air pollution. Northern China oftern has clearer, bluer skies in winter than in other seasons. Snowfall is guaranteed in many locations and makes China's beautiful landscaps even more attractive. Iconic landmarks such as the Great Wall are even more beautiful when covered with snow in winter.

For travelers who only seek advice from blogs or books, their pre-trip image of China focuses only on a few big cities, such as Beijing, Shanghai, Guangzhou and Shenzhen. Smaller cities are considered less fun and therefore not worth visiting. However, foreign visitors who have experienced China before may tell you that they found more joy and great scenery, and gained a deeper understanding of China, by visiting some smaller cities. For them, China's beauty lies not only in its vibrant metropolises, but also in the ancient city walls and spectacular natural wonders.

In conclusion, what you read about a place may differ greatly from your actual experience of it. While travel blogs and books can be helpful, they should not be your only source of information. The best way to truly understand a place is to experience it for yourself.

侯凯同学每次都非常认真完成作文，特别好！


这篇作文要求大家使用比较对照的方式来写，引言段落的主题句侯凯同学写的非常好：The rapid development of China has created aclear divide between the perceptions formed through online reading and thefirsthand experience of foreign visitors, especially in terms of air qualityand places to visit. 既向读者预示了比较对照（a clear divide between ...） 又告知读者比较的两个方面，简洁明了，不错。如果要加强一点的话，可以把air quality改为environmental conditions，palces to visit改为travel destinations。between这个词后面表示限定的foreign visitors有点远，可考虑改为between foreign visitors' pre-trip perceptionsand their firsthand experiences。

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Many travel bloggers used to talk about the heavy air pollution in China, which would put off anyone planning to visit northern China in winter. However, those who have experienced northern China in winter in recent years can tell you that this is an outdated concern, thanks to China's continuous efforts to control air pollution. Northern China oftern has clearer, bluer skies in winter than in other seasons. Snowfall is guaranteed in many locations and makes China's beautiful landscaps even more attractive. Iconic landmarks such as the Great Wall are even more beautiful when covered with snow in winter.

For travelers who only seek advice from blogs or books, their pre-trip image of China focuses only on a few big cities, such as Beijing, Shanghai, Guangzhou and Shenzhen. Smaller cities are considered less fun and therefore not worth visiting. However, foreign visitors who have experienced China before may tell you that they found more joy and great scenery, and gained a deeper understanding of China, by visiting some smaller cities. For them, China's beauty lies not only in its vibrant metropolises, but also in the ancient city walls and spectacular natural wonders.

正文段落开始比较对照，我们可以清晰地看见两个正文段落都是同一个结构：之前印象==》之后印象，重点放在之后印象。两个正文段落的句首都使用的反驳结构，这样写是可以的（我们下下周会学）。不过也可以尝试一下给两个段落增加一个段首主题句的写法 ：）

第一个正文段落中，我的建议是之前印象可以增加一些生动的描述（偏见版），以及偏见的原因（刻舟求剑与以偏概全），写到之后印象时可以提到这种差异给外国游客亲历中国时带来的感受以及这种变化的implications。
第二个正文段落中对于非大城市的旅游地深入的不够：它们与大城市相比又那些动人之处呢？目前写的比较泛泛（ more joy and great scenery；gained a deeper understanding of China），仔细思考，然后写出更具体的闪光点来，跟中国大城市的旅游风格形成互补。

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继续正文段落：

目前只有两点的比较，我们来看比较的点：一方面单独说空气质量，另一个时旅游地点选择，你会不会觉得相对于“中国”来说稍微显得有点薄弱？作比较对照时，我们选择的比较点应该是主要的比较点（page 91），所以建议把第一点更改为environmental conditions (可以包括空气质量、干净的路面、行道树郁郁葱葱等)。

其次，目前这两点的比较显得单薄。在英文写作中3是个神奇的数字：一般来说，我们比较期待三个正文段落。所以，建议正文段落中加上一个中国人的比较：这一点外国人的体验也是有极大反差的，好吗？正好放在第三个正文段落，接上面的小城市的烟火味。

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In conclusion, what you read about a place may differ greatly from your actual experience of it. While travel blogs and books can be helpful, they should not be your only source of information. The best way to truly understand a place is to experience it for yourself.

结尾段落的结构也很清晰，不过可以尝试跟引言段落所提到的这两方面进行呼应（air quality & palces to visit）来更进一步强化这个差别：在中国飞速发展的今日，唯一可靠的应该是第一手体验

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语言方面：单词拼写有个别的笔误，记得提交前要检查。

还有，可以多用比较对照的一些表达，比如：equally misleading is ... ; Contrary to popular portrayal, ... ; 或者 This stands in sharp contrast to ...
这样的话对比感会更强一些。

个别地方的语言可以改得更正式一些，比如less fun，可以改为less appealing, 或者点明 less culturally engaging/significant

”they found more joy and great scenery“ 你可以自己检查一下，有没有错误啊？

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Keep up the good work!

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谢谢老师的点评，应该写成They found more joy and more beautiful scenery.